Today I watched an animation produced by the Guardian based on testimonies of hunger strikers at Guantanamo. This afternoon I went to a writing group and learned about a Malaysian poem structure called The Pantoum. There is a particular pattern of repetition. We were asked to write about something that had impacted us in the last couple of days. So this is what I wrote:
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| source: muftah.org |
H Strikes G
Razor wire coils endlessly
A black mark upon the
Caribbean sea
Orange mocks the theft of
dignity
Ahmed chokes
A black mark upon the
Caribbean sea
Rubber snake forced down
tender tubes
Ahmed chokes
Fuel injected into
resisting guts
Rubber snake forced down
tender tubes
Razor teeth drip with
canine slobber
Fuel injected into
resisting guts
Strain at chains; strain
at collar
Razor teeth drip with
canine slobber
The dogs are treated
better
Strain at chains; strain
at collar
Samir only wants to see
his family again
The dogs are treated
better
Last shred of memory
ripped from the wall
Samir only wants to see
his family again
Cleared for release; they
remain detained
Last shreds of memory
ripped from the wall
Orange mocks the theft of
dignity
Cleared for release; they
remain detained
Razor wire coils endlessly
3 comments:
thought i'd do a comment as i always love yours... just to say goooood poem. i like it a lot and you have undeniable skills x
Ah thanks little one :-)
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